Issue: Editorial comments on draft-ietf-radext-ieee802-00.txt

["Nelson, David" <dnelson@enterasys.com>]

Submitter name: David Nelson
Submitter email address: dnelson@enterasys.com
Date first submitted: August 10, 2005
Reference: (missing from the RADEXT archive ???)
Document: VLAN, Priority and Filtering Attributes
Comment type: 'E' Editorial
Priority: '1' Should fix
Section: 1
Rationale/Explanation of issue:

Better phrasing.

Requested changes:

(1) 

       Within the confines of RADIUS authentication, authorization, and
       accounting (AAA) environments, there is a general dearth of
       standardized RADIUS attributes to limit user access using dynamic
       VLANs, filters or redirection.
 
 
Could we change "a general dearth of" to "a requirement for"?  It sounds
more positive.

(2)

      IEEE 802.1X-2004 [IEEE8021X] provides "network port 
      authentication" for IEEE 802 [IEEE802] media, including Ethernet 
      [IEEE8023], Token Ring and 802.11 wireless LANs [IEEE80211i].

Remove this sentence as it appears in the second paragraph as well.

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