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> From: housley@vigilsec.com > To: iesg@ietf.org > CC: radext-chairs@tools.ietf.org; draft-ietf-radext-design@tools.ietf.org; gdweber@gmail.com; aland@freeradius.org > Date: Mon, 20 Apr 2009 14:27:06 -0700 > Subject: COMMENT: draft-ietf-radext-design > > Comment: > > The Gen-ART Review by Gonzalo Camarillo on 8 April 2009 provides some > editorial suggestions. > > ID nits complains that reference [8] appears in Appendix B.6 but not > in the References. > > The Introduction Section should be a non-normative section. However, > Section 1.1 uses normative statements (RECOMMENDED and NOT > RECOMMENDED) before those terms are defined in Section 1.3. > > The acronym AAA should be expanded. > > When referring to the appendixes, I think the draft should talk about > appendixes, not about sections. For example, it should talk about > Appendix A.5, not about Section A.5. > |