comment: draft-ietf-v6ops-ipv4survey-intro-01.txt

[itojun@iijlab.net]

	i made a quick one-path on the draft.
	i dunno how the references between sections are managed,
	i hope it is automated somehow...

itojun


overall
	"this problem has been fixed..." to state that there's IPv6 variant
	available for the document looks strange to me.

line 250
	wrong: STD 44/RFC 891 in Section 3.44
	right: STD 44/RFC 891 in Section 3.1.17
line 274 (3.1.1)
	why this document suggests updates to RFC1812 to include IPv6 routing
	requirement, while suggesting separate IPv6 variant for RFC1122?
	not sure which is the right way to go.
line 280 (3.1.3)
	these "has been updated" statement look strange to me.  how about:

	RFC791 defines IPv4.  RFC2460 defines IPv6.
	Similarly to RFC922 which defines IPv4 addressing architecture,
	RFC2373 defines IPv6 addressing architecture.
	RFC792 defines ICMP for IPv4.  RFC2463 defines ICMPv6, which is ICMP
	for IPv6.
	RFC1122 defines IGMP, Internet Group Management Protocol for IPv4.
	RFC2710 defines MLD, Multicast Listener Discovery, which is basically
	IGMP for IPv6.
line 303 (3.1.6)
	which document deprecates the use of literal IP address?  RFC2822 still
	has domain-literal syntax, i.e. itojun@[10.1.1.1].
line 335 (3.1.13)
	how about:
	RFC2467 defines a method for the transmission IPv6 over FDDI networks.
line 339 (3.1.14)
	how about:
	RFC2464 defines a method for the transmission IPv6 over ethernet networks.
line 358 (3.1.19)
	how about:
	RFC2497 defines a method for the transmission IPv6 over ARCnet networks.
line 383 (3.1.23)
	how about:
	RFC2740 defines OSPF for IPv6.
line 388 (3.1.24)
	how about:
	RFC2080 defines RIPng, RIP for IPv6.
line 397 (3.2.1)
	i don't think there's enough specification for DHCPv6 options to
	replace bootp as a whole.
line 410 (3.2.3)
	how about:
	RFC1981 defines path MTU discovery for IPv6.
line 560 (3.3.8)
	I don't think there's applicability statement for OSPFv3 in RFC2740.
line 756 (3.3.43)
	I don't think RFC2492 defines IPv6 *broadcast* over ATM.
	how about:
	IPv6 does not utilize link-layer broadcast.