Re: Changes in -07 of model document

[Fred Douglis <douglis@research.att.com>]

Mark,

All in all it looks fine.  I have a few comments, a couple of which might not 
fall into the category of typos, so I am cc'ing the list.

    Abstract

       Content internetworking (CDI) is the technology for interconnecting

FD> In the intro, you explain the acronym.  I think you should either
FD> explain where the "D" comes from here as well, or preferably,
FD> simply remove the acronym in the abstract.

FD> Speaking of which, I note this is day-cdnp-yadda-yadda, probably
FD> for historical reasons as well.  Will the I-Ds ever migrate to
FD> CDI?  Are you waiting for it to be officially chartered (makes
FD> sense)?  And most importantly, whatever happened to it being
FD> chartered?  We're not still in review, are we?  Haven't seen
FD> anything since the WG review on 7/30.

       content networks, previously called "content peering," "CDN
       peering," or "content distribution internetworking." A common
       vocabulary helps the process of discussing such interconnection and
       interoperation.  This document introduces content networks and
       content internetworking, and defines elements for such a common
       vocabulary.

       ...
       Section 2 provides background on content networks.  Section 3
       introduces the terms used for elements of a content network and
       explains how those terms are used. Section 5 deals with content
       internetworking, introducing the terms and explaining how those
       terms are used. The remainder of the document notes various
       operational and security considerations that are relevant to content
       internetworking.

FD> You fail to introduce Section 4 here.  I know it's short.  Either
FD> remove the section, or give it a sentence here :)

       ...
       To address these limitations. another type of content network that
       has been deployed in increasing numbers in recent years is the
       Content Distribution Network, or CDN. A CDN essentially combines the

FD> It probably makes sense to say that this is also known as a
FD> Content -Delivery- Network.  I looked into this some time ago and
FD> found the terms used quite interchangeably, even though I thought
FD> at the time that Distribution was much preferred.

       ...
    6. Operational Considerations

       [Editor's Note: Consider problem of incorrect advertisements of
       content or service levels. Need to ensure that there are means
       within the protocol or recommended practices so that CDNs aren't
       encouraged to pull traffic they can't really handle.]

FD> Seems time to get past the editor's notes and into real text :)
 
       ...
    8. Acknowledgements

       The authors acknowledge the contributions and comments of Fred
       Douglis (AT&T), Don Gilletti (CacheFlow), Markus Hoffmann (Lucent),
       Barron Housel (Cisco), Barbara Liskov (Cisco), John Martin (Network
       Appliance), Raj Nair (Cisco), Hilarie Orman (Novell), Doug Potter
       (Cisco), Oliver Spatscheck (AT&T), and Nalin Mistry (Nortel).

FD> The last name seems to be the only one out of alphabetical order.

Fred