Re: I-D ACTION:draft-shin-v6ops-application-transition-02.txt (fwd)

["JORDI PALET MARTINEZ" <jordi.palet@consulintel.es>]

Hi,

I think is a very good work, just found a couple of minor errors.

1. have been developed to migrate 
replace with "have been developed to do the transition from IPv4 to IPv6 networks"
or "have been developed for the transition of the today's IPv4 networks"
or "have been developed for the transition of IPv4 networks to IPv6"
(other combinations possible !, key points: avoid using "migration/migrate", and use "networks" instead of "network")

3.2 DNS does not indicate which the IP version will be used
replace with "DNS does not indicate which IP version will be used"

Regards,
Jordi

----- Original Message ----- 
From: "Pekka Savola" <pekkas@netcore.fi>
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Sent: Tuesday, October 21, 2003 2:21 PM
Subject: I-D ACTION:draft-shin-v6ops-application-transition-02.txt (fwd)


> Hi,
> 
> The application "transition" document has seen significant revision:
> 
> http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-shin-v6ops-application-transition-02.txt
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> All comments would be appreciated.
> 
> -- 
> Pekka Savola                 "You each name yourselves king, yet the
> Netcore Oy                    kingdom bleeds."
> Systems. Networks. Security. -- George R.R. Martin: A Clash of Kings
> ---------- Forwarded message ----------
> Date: Mon, 20 Oct 2003 15:40:02 -0400
> From: Internet-Drafts@ietf.org
> To: IETF-Announce:  ;
> Subject: I-D ACTION:draft-shin-v6ops-application-transition-02.txt
> 
> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts directories.
> 
> 
> Title : Application Aspects of IPv6 Transition
> Author(s) : M. Shin, et. al.
> Filename : draft-shin-v6ops-application-transition-02.txt
> Pages : 26
> Date : 2003-10-20
> 
> The document specifies application aspects of IPv6 transition. As
> IPv6 is deployed, the application developers and the administrators
> will face several problems.  This draft clarifies the problems and
> considerations occurring in transition period between IPv4
> applications and IPv6 applications. It also proposes guidelines
> that help application developers understand how to develop IP
> version-independent applications during the transition period.
> 
> A URL for this Internet-Draft is:
> http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-shin-v6ops-application-transition-02.txt
> 

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