Margaret, all,
Jari, please look over my comments below and make your own decision
about whether to continue to hold a discuss based on these issues.
Although I would like to see one more clean-up pass, I would
certainly understand if you'd rather call it "good enough" at this
point.
I have re-read the document and I'm generally happy with it.
Thanks for the great improvement! I cleared my Discuss,
but added Margaret's substantive notes as a Comment.
I would recommend following her suggestions, however.
--Jari