Thanks Fernando for your review.On Oct 9, 2009, at 4:11 PM, Fernando Gont wrote: Hello, Roque, Here's some feedback on the aforementioned I-D. * Editorial * Abstract: This document provides a guide for IPv6 deployment in Internet
s/a guide for/guidance on/
done. Exchange Points (IXP). It includes information regarding the switch
s/information/advice/
In SFP we decided to be informational and not BCP.
fabric configuration, the addressing plan and general organizational
tasks to be performed. IXPs are mainly a layer 2 infrastructure and
s/to be/that need to be/
done in many case the best recommendations state that the IPv6 data,
s/case/cases/ s/state/suggest/
done Introduction: Most Internet Exchange Points (IXP) work on the Layer 2 level, making
the adoption of IPv6 an easy task.
s/work on/work at/ I found it hard to parse this sentence: This document clarifies the impact of IPv6
on a new or an existing IXP that may or may not fit any particular
deployment.
I deleted the sentence. Section 2: However, some management
functions require explicit IPv6 support (such as switch management,
SNMP support and flow analysis exportation) and this should be
assessed by the IXP operator.
Include a (Informative) reference to the SNMP spec.
done scenario, participants will typically configure dual stack
s/dual stack/dual-stack/
done. BTW, in this text: scenario, participants will typically configure dual stack
interfaces, although independent port can be an option.
You meant something like "...will typically configure interfaces as dual-stack, although independent interfaces could be possibly used for each version of IP"?
correct. traffic. If IXP participants are already using Virtual LAN
(VLAN) tagging on their routers interfaces that are facing the
IXP switch,
Rephrase as "If IXP participants are already using Virtual LAN (VLAN) tagging on those interfaces of their routers that are facing the IXP switch...."
done. Conversely, the dual stack implementation allows a quick and capital
cost-free start-up for IPv6 support in the IXP, allowing the IXP to
s/dual stack/dual-stack/ Maybe s/capital cost-free/inexpensive/ ?
not the same concept. I rather leave the original sentence.
P.S.: More in the pipeline!
Thanks again.
Roque.
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