RE: FW: I-D ACTION:draft-ietf-v6ops-ent-scenarios-03.txt

["Bound, Jim" <jim.bound@hp.com>]

This looks good to me if others are fine with it.
Thanks
/jim 

> -----Original Message-----
> From: owner-v6ops@ops.ietf.org 
> [mailto:owner-v6ops@ops.ietf.org] On Behalf Of Margaret Wasserman
> Sent: Tuesday, June 29, 2004 1:44 PM
> To: Soininen Jonne (Nokia-NET/Helsinki)
> Cc: v6ops@ops.ietf.org
> Subject: Re: FW: I-D ACTION:draft-ietf-v6ops-ent-scenarios-03.txt
> 
> 
> Hi Jonne,
> 
> In general, I think this document looks good.
> 
> There are two small issues that I think should be addressed 
> before it goes to the IESG, though.
> 
> (1) There are several lines in the document that are longer 
> than 80 characters and there may be other I-D Checklist 
> violations (I didn't do a complete check).  Is it safe to 
> assume that the WG chairs will do an I-D Checklist review and 
> get any issues fixed before sending this to the IESG?
> 
> (2) The abstract doesn't seem very clear to me...
> 
> It says:
> 
>     This document describes the scenarios for IPv6 deployment within
>     enterprise networks.  It will focus upon an enterprise 
> set of network
>     base scenarios with assumptions, coexistence with legacy 
> IPv4 nodes,
>     networks, and applications, and network infrastructure 
> requirements.
>     These requirements will be used to provide analysis to determine a
>     set of enterprise solutions in a later document.
> 
> How about this?
> 
>     This document describes the scenarios for IPv6 deployment within
>     enterprise networks.  It defines a small set of basic enterprise
>     scenarios and includes pertinent questions to allow enterprise
>     administrators to further refine their deployment 
> scenarios.  Enterprise
>     deployment requirements are discussed in terms of coexistence with
>     IPv4 nodes, networks and applications, and in terms of 
> basic network
>     infrastructure requirements for IPv6 deployment.  The 
> scenarios and
>     requirements described in this document will be the basis 
> for further
>     analysis to determine what coexistence techniques and mechanisms
>     are needed for enterprise IPv6 deployment.  The results 
> of that analysis
>     will be published in a separate document.
> 
> Margaret
> 
> 
>